Six Sentence Sunday #29 – see Janna melt in want

Happy Six Sunday. Thanks for visiting this week and I’d love to know what you think!! I have another 6 from my latest Novella BDSM WIP. It’s a sequel to the WIP I have been sharing these past many weeks. Last Week: while in Chicago for a conference, Janna gets a chance to enter a BDSM club for the first time. She’s found her escort in Master Simon. Last week he walked her to the playroom door. This Week: I’m giving you the very next 6.

Club music, with a heavy bass, beat through her chest. Smacks of paddles, whooshes of whips, and bodies meeting wrenched throughout the room. Her eyes wide with trepidation and exhilaration located the nearest scene. Her feet found their way.

The woman knelt before her Dom, her eyes focused on him alone. Her hands bound behind her back displayed her trust. Janna melted in want.

Will Janna get a taste of what she wants? Thank you so much for stopping by today!! I’d like to know what you really think of my 6. I need the advice, I’m a newbie and have much to learn. Don’t forget to check out the other Six Sunday authors. Lots of good stuff at Six Sunday and its days are now sadly numbered. I’m not crying. Try to find a new favorite today. happy hunting!

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30 thoughts on “Six Sentence Sunday #29 – see Janna melt in want

  1. Sexy–love that last line! Sounds like she’s in her element now. Great six, great story. Really makes me want to read more. Just a couple of proofreading notes (which you’d probably find in edits anyway, so hope this speeds that along for you, LOL!): I think you mean “heavy bass, beat…” not base. Also, I found “‘wrenched’ throughout the room” confusing. I don’t *think* that’s the meaning you meant…but it’s up to you. Can’t wait to see what happens next in this story!

  2. You know, of all the times I’ve read play room / club scenes (not THAT many but a few), no one has ever mentioned (to my recollection) the sounds of paddles and whips. It’s usually a visual description with maybe the mention of music. Nicely done.

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