Tuesdays aren’t for flashing…they’re for teasing. The rules of TT: I select the picture and 200 words to tease.
Photo Credit: Dave R Farmer
The mist rolled through the flowers like a long lost friend. She’d never seen the meadow before, but the image kept coming to her. She’d forgotten so much in the accident last year, making her imagination a tricky thing. She’d always wanted brothers and sisters. In her vision she was the oldest of four, no five.
Her mother’s maid packed the picnic and mother encouraged them all to find the Blackstonia before they closed for the day. She and Georgette chased each other to their favorite open meadow, half tripping and full on giggling along the way. They came to a full halted stop at the edge of the plane. The mist was heavier here, it kissed your skin like a whisper. Beyond the tree, Susanna searched. Would he come today? Would she see the man that had quickly and quietly come to brighten her mornings and occupy her mind? She squinted and made out a flick of his cloak.
“He’s here”
“Who’s here?”
“What?” She shook her head from the disorienting vision. “Oh. Hi, Father. I was just breathing life into my imagination again.”
“Susanna, who’s here?”
She thought of the cloaked man, if only it could be him.
Hope you enjoyed my tease today!! This is the beginning of a story I’ve been wanting to write for some time. Don’t forget to visit the other teasers at Tantalizing Tuesday. Or click away on the links below.
Naomi Shaw: www.authornaomishaw.com
Jake Malden: http://jakemalden.blogspot.com/
Muffy Wilson: http://muffywilson.blogspot.com
Lee Brazil: http://leebrazilauthor.blogspot.com
Julez S Morbius: http://morbiussworld.blogspot.co.uk/
Savannah Chase http://www.savannahchase.com/blog
Pablo Michaels http://www.pablomichaels.com/, http://pmmanman.romance.weebly.com
Havan Fellows http://havanshawthaven.blogspot.com
Cg Brumby http://cgbrumby.blogspot.com.au
Dianne Hartsock http://diannehartsock.wordpress.com/my-blog/
Ray Sostre: http://theafterdarkworld.blogspot.com
S.J. Maylee 
Very sweet and mysterious. It’s almost as if she’s living two lives at once. Great post. 🙂
Thanks, Dianne. You got it, her old life is trying to break free of her memory block.
Lovely. Very well written. I have to know more. 🙂
Thanks, Naomi 🙂
Very nice! I like the blending of the worlds- perhaps we’ll see the two meld one day?
Thanks, Lee!! Yes, I hope so too. This story has been swirling around in my brain for some time. I know why and how the two worlds will reveal themselves and I’m looking forward to writing it.
“The mist was heavier here, it kissed your skin like a whisper.” Love this! I’m there. Thanks for the tease. 🙂
The photo you chose is beautiful and the tease is just fantastic. Loved it.
What a let down and disappointment. The guilt trip she must feel when she hoped for her cloaked man.
There’s a beautiful poetic quality to this, that and a tantalizing hint of mysticism. The perfect tease for your story.
beautifully written tease
You certainly painted the picture with this tease. You actually had me squinting at the image to see if I could spot the flick of his cloak through the misty fog. Well done! 🙂
tee hee hee, the cloak is in there, somewhere 😉
Nice. The picture is very atmospheric.
Very nice piece. I love the description of the teaser, it was mysterious.
This is such a sweet, mysterious and well written tease. Well done!
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