Welcome friends new and old. I’m going to give you a couple more posts from the WIP I’ve been sharing before I move onto something new.
In the Blind (working title), and you can see the past posts from this WIP here. The Logline: When a head hunter finds her dream lover in a night of pitch black unrestrained passion, she fears she’ll never find him again. Fate steps in and throws the two together, but they might never discover the truth and stay in the blind.
Over the past few weeks I’ve shared Jane’s experience at Club Blind and her business opportunity that put her back in touch with Rob. Rob isn’t keen on Jane’s job opportunity. It’s for the company his ex-wife works for. Last Post Jane politely got up from the table and was ready to walk away. In this week’s post, I’ve skipped nothing.
“Wait.” He grabbed hold of her hand which was not yet out of reach. “I’m over-reacting.” He stood, leaving little distance between them. She looked beautiful, arching her neck to look into his eyes. He breathed in her sweet vanilla scent and he felt her fingers fold around his hand.
“Are you sure?” With the positive shake of his head she continued, “It would mean the world to me if you would meet with Keller. I know he’d be impressed by you.”
I’m impressed by you, Rob. He’s made his decision, but is it the right one? <If you want, you can Tweet That>
Hope you enjoyed my eight today. Thank you so much for visiting me, it means a lot to me that you took the time to visit my little place on the web. Don’t forget to check out the other Weekend Warriors, and Saturday Spankings too.
I like how much they touch in this scene, as well as the way you describe it.
I love the emotion in this scene, what will he do! Can’t wait to find out!
That folding of her fingers around his hand. Bam! Nice. Great snippet here!
Good job showing that they both have a stake in the outcome!
Nice snippet. I like the way they touched.
I agree with AJ, yes, very nice.
Liked the set up for what she wants! good eight!
I’m glad he re-thought before she left! Another excellent snippet, can’t wait for more.
Sweet and simple, I loved the emotion in this piece.
Glad he shook off his misgivings so he could spend more time with her and the hand touches were awesome.
Every time I see your “tweet that” I remember I need to try it. So I made a quickie edit this AM. Since I “clone” posts from week to week, now I should be sure to remember for next week’s.
Thanks! 🙂
I do the same thing. Coping posts saves a bunch of time. Love your tweet that by the way.
Good for him for having the courage to snag what he wants. Great snippet, SJ. 🙂
So glad he stopped her from leaving. This seems to be a turning point for them both.
Ooh, I like the tension in the beginning. Nice job and nice snippet!
I’m proud of him too. And I love her reaction, taking his hand. Nice.
A memorable moment for me was the folding of her fingers around his hand. Lovely!
Great scene. Love how you described her looking up at him.
I agree with the comments above. Great show of emotion through touch. Loving your snippets, SJ!
Thanks everyone! 😀
Whew, finally making my rounds–didn’t want to fall behind on the snippets. You convey so much emotion in so few words. Wonderful job, S.J. 🙂
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