Happy Six Sunday and Happy Father’s day. Thanks for visiting and I’d love to know what you think!! I’m continuing this week with another 6 from my Novella WIP that is currently lost in editsville. Last week: we’ve been watching Jake begin to roll out his plan. This week: it’s Lydia that’s trying to start her own plan. The pair have finally left work and are traveling on the L to Lydia’s neighborhood.
Why couldn’t the train jerk them around, like it usually did, and force their bodies to meet? He stood behind her. One step was all it would take and she could blame the train. Her free hand longed to hold onto his powerful thigh. The urge to lean back into him pulled at her courage.
The train came to her stop and her chance to touch him evaporated, the disappointment ran deep and sour.
Thank you so much for stopping by today!! I’d like to know what you really think of my 6. I need the advice, I’m a newbie and have much to learn. My WIP is in the middle of editsville and I look forward to querying with it soon. Don’t forget to check out the other Six Sunday authors. Lots of good stuff at Six Sunday. Try to find a new favorite today. happy hunting!
I love the concept of blaming the train, been there done that! 😉 Great six.
I can definitely feel the torment here – very nice! I really love this sentence: “The urge to lean back into him pulled at her courage.” Great visual there.
Aw, frustration all around no doubt. loved it!
The urge to lean back into him pulled at her courage. What a beautiful line! Awesome six, S.J.
Maybe she could pretend somebody bumped into her! LOL. Realistic six.
I could feel the frustration in your six. Well done!
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Why do trains never do what you want them to do! LOL, great six!
Great six. Powerful. I fel the frustration and her tactile desire to touch him. Well done, S.J.
love the word choice ‘evaporated’ 🙂 so descriptive!
Oh, I hate it when a plan doesn’t work out, LOL, could really feel her disappointment – great six!
I could totally sympathize with her. Nice job!
I have been there! Good scene with her frustrated over this guy. Love it!!
Uh-oh, a woman being groped on the subway? Maybe not the best plan. I think Jake will work out something good though. Very nicely written six, S.J. !!
Love how you’ve phrased everything. Very poignant..
Sorry, I have no advice. This is a very well-written six!
Kate you are the sweetest 🙂
Too bad the train stopped! Maybe the next ride will be different!
I love this! I was right there with her on the L. I hate riding those things, and its crazy how you have the smoothest ride in the history of transport when you don’t want it to be.
Great way to use the setting/environment to increase tension, well done!
Aw poor thing! 🙂
This is beautifully descriptive!
I think you wrote an amazingly sensual six. I’m right there with her, caught up in her feelings of longing and regret. Well done!
Love your six! Very frustrating that we (I mean Lydia) didn’t get an opportunity to act. But they are going to her neighborhood… so, does that mean to her house? Hmm…
I love the pace and tension of this snippet, SJ.
You know I can’t wait to read this!
Oh, interesting train ride.
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