Welcome friends new and old. I’m giving you 8 from my hero’s POV as promised. I kept my other promise this week too, I’ve sent this MS to my CP. Wahoo!
In the Blind (working title), and you can see the past posts from this WIP here. The Logline: When a head hunter finds her dream lover in a night of pitch black unrestrained passion, she fears she’ll never find him again. Fate steps in and throws the two together, but they might never discover the truth and stay in the blind.
Over the past few weeks I’ve shared Jane’s experience at Club Blind. Last Week Jane kept her mind from drifting to her mystery man, from the club, by working on a job opening for a VIP client. She met the perfect match for the job last month at a technology conference. She got Rob to agree to a meet. Lucky for us the first thing Rob does is call his best friend, Marcus.
“Marcus, she called.”
“Who is this?”
“Stop it, you know what I’m talking about.” He opened his closet and searched for the right suit.
“You think? You’ve only managed to squeeze Jane into almost every conversation since that convention.”
“No, I have not.”
“Do you want a recap?”
Sounds like those boys like to give each other a good ribbing. So, Rob has been thinking about Jane, very interesting. Do you want 8-more from this WIP next week? I could give you 8 from when Jane and Rob met or should I give you something from an entirely new WIP?
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Ha! great exchange!
Ah! He likes Jane I think. Love the exchange between the lads. 😉
He’s been so passionate about Jane, he conveniently forgot he talks of her constantly! I like the playfulness between these two guys.
Enjoyed the ribbing going on here.
hehehe. Love the friendly exchange. Their relationship shows. I love this story. Very hooked. 🙂
Snappy dialogue! Beautiful!
Terrific dialogue- You showed so much through it and I like the friendly banter between the two. Thank you for sharing!
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Great dialogue. You’ve captured the male POV very well and illustrated their friendship beautifully.
I love that he’s been talking about her all this time. The dialog was terrific and so was the snippet!
Great dialogue exchange. Congrats on finishing and sending to the CP!
Love the exchange here. Yep quite interesting that he’s been thinking of Jane. I want more.
“Do you want a recap?” LOL I love Marcus, already. The friendship between the two men is very fun.
I think he kinda likes this Jane person. 🙂 It’s fun seeing the joking and very well done. Loved this snippet. 🙂
Okay, so was it Marcus or Rob in the darkened club? (I’m kinda hoping it was Marcus, ’cause — wow! — talk about conflict.)
lol *snort* “Do you want a recap?” Loved it!
I agree with Gemma, you’ve created an excellent exchange between these two. Great job!
This is getting very interesting. Will they get any weird vibes when they meet? Looking forward to next weeks snippet!
I like your dialogue. It’s natural and flows well.
Great exchange between them, very realistic!
Not sure if the mystery man is Rob or Marcus. Looking forward to finding out.
I love that we get Rob’s POV. He is really into Jane. Is it because of her looks, her personality? When Marcus asks, “Do you want a recap?” I’m like YES! I wanna know why he’s so hooked on her. Great 8!
Hmmm. Great set-up for a hot story. Love sense-deprevation as a way of accessing the more base emotions of the body and deeper levels of love. And wow, yes, I’m probably projecting here. 🙂
I’d love another 8 from this WIP thanks!
I wonder how he knew who Jane was? Hmm…
I love his excitement and his snarky friend. Great snippet and I’m looking forward to this story, SJ. 😀
I LOVE his reaction! Great personality here. ;c)
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